we had to use SAT words in it:
It was a Friday afternoon, and Kathy was having possibly one of the best days she could ever remember in Mill Will Highschool. She aced her biology exam, was elected as President of the National Honor Society, and had also made the cheerlead squad. All of Kathy’s friends were able to notice how blithe she was today, as she strut the cacophonous hallways with a big grin. Everything was going perfect for her until Tim appeared.
Kathy had an aversion towards Tim. She considered him as a bizarre buffoon who was always looking for ways to belittle others accomplishments and self-esteem. He made his so called “peers” think low of them by picking out their flaws in public for the world to hear which, ironically, in turn, made him feel good. Tim was a part of one of those “cool” guy cliques, who loved to order the people around into doing what they wanted them to do. Kathy knew that Tim was a person who would never change his ways for anyone. She censured his mother’s carping to the teachers for the way he turned out to be. If Tim’s mother wasn’t always too busy complaining on how harsh the teachers were being to her “sweet little honeysuckle,” then maybe she would’ve realized that her son was in need of serious discipline. Even though Tim was in high school, he does not yet understand that people, too, have feelings.
“Hey, you know that humans are supposed to shower everyday right?” Tim asked.
Kathy’s face turned red as ripe as a tomato. She hadn’t expected that her “perfect day” would be ruined oh so horribly. She found Tim’s remark to be so caustic that she ran to the girls’ bathroom thinking of it as her cache from the humility she had to face in the hallway in front of her friends. Kathy covered her mouth with one hand and screamed as loudly as she could for cathartic relief. Just then, her friend Allison came into cajole her to come out and give Tim a taste of his own medicine.
Kathy looked at Allison and hugged her, right before she ferociously marched out into the hallways, where everyone was still laughing and giggling a bit, nonetheless however, she did not capitulate.
“You are the catalyst for all the stink and stupidity in mankind Tim Milford!” shouted Kathy.
Suddenly, the hallway went in total silence as many people had a shocked look on their face. Some stared at Kathy with celestial wonder for whom she had just stood up to. Tim was speechless, and all Kathy thought in her mind was I’m not ruining my day for something so absurd and stupid stated by Tim.
p.S the title is %26quot;Stupidity%26quot; ?Can someone proofread my story plz! only about 3 paragraphs! plzzz.?
Line 2 should be High School
3 Isn't it chearleading squad? I'm not sure.
Tab the paragraphs
8 I think others should have an apostraphe but not so sure
19 should be as red as
24 should be in to
25 shouldn't have a comma
26 should have a semi colon after bit
and put her thought in the last line in quotes or italicize
